12 responses to “The Change I’d Be Tempted to Make …”

  1. christopher

    Safari MacIntosh

    Oh and cut down that pretentious and pedantic speech at the end to maybe 10 pages!

  2. Kevin Carson

    Firefox 3.5.5 MacIntosh

    Face slapping. The brakeman doesn’t get enough face slapping. You can’t be a Randian hero without slapping faces.

    1. John

      MSIE 8.0 Windows Vista

      Who is John Galt? would have a different answer.

      1. John

        MSIE 8.0 Windows Vista

        Oops. That wasn’t intended as a reply to that comment.

  3. Aster

    Firefox 3.5.5 MacIntosh

    Some ideas:

    (1) reinstate the priest striker character. Rand’s early concepts show an utterly fascinating personality. I think that by excluding him she did the right thing philosophically and the wrong thing aesthetically.

    (2) give Ragnar Danneskjöld as big a part as Francisco and ?John Galt. Use his mobility to show something of the ‘Peoples State” world outside America and present what rotting collectivist Hell looks like.

    (3) make the heroic characters more expressively alive. Stress by contrast the ‘Pleasantville’ conventional nature of the looters and moochers.

    (4) get some diversity in the cast. She really didn’t need to emphasise Francisco’s pure European ancestry as a feature. If individualism has nothing to do with being a rich white guy then show it. ‘Men of the mind’ are precisely those who think by looking at reality instead of looking at those around and before them. Human excellence is essentially acultural or even anticultural. If we must all escape our own caves of origin, then we should expect thinking people to be refugees from all the caves of the world.

  4. Grant Gould

    Firefox 3.0.15 Ubuntu 9.04

    Let Galt die in the torture chamber at the end.

    + Gives some semblance of relevance to Galt’s enormo-speech (what was the point of the speech if we still have Galt around afterward?).

    + Removes the mood-breaking shoot-lots-of-confused-guards-but-it-isn’t-really-initiation-of-force fight scene.

    + Makes Galt’s total lack of characterization less egregious.

    + Puts someone other than Galt — someone with discernable motivations — in the Heroic Tableux of the last paragraph.

    + If a book is going to have a torture-porn climax, “the political class murders the proletariat, but the revolution proceeds nonetheless” is a much less muddy message for it.

  5. Anna Morgenstern

    Firefox 3.5.5 Windows XP

    The “Galt as proletarian” thing might be more of an issue than you imply here. One of the subtexts that I always got from the story was that the reason why it took someone like John Galt to start the shrugging is that in the early days of the novel, to people like Dagny or Hank, things don’t seem *that bad* yet… they’re running into annoyances but they haven’t seen how crushing these interventions are for the (honest) working class.
    If you get rid of that it changes the whole story almost, at least for me. I’m not sure how you could move that to the brakeman, unless he’s the guy who inspires D’Anconia/Galt to start the movement.

    As for the speech, I definitely think it could be done well in a movie, if you make it sort of a montage shot, maybe showing society breaking down all over the place, while the speech is being played from loudspeakers everywhere… it still might need to be cut though… 10 minutes of speech would be ok maybe, 30 minutes would be too much…

  6. Thomas L. Knapp

    Safari MacIntosh

    Getting rid of Galt might be an interesting proposition, especially if they could write the whole perpetual motion machine thing out of it with him.

  7. Natailya Petrova

    Firefox 3.5.1.NETCLR3.5.30729 Windows XP

    You have a mission now, Roderick

    Rewriting Atlas Shrugged! Suspect a lawsuit is headed your way….